B02 | Preachy Lines: Hide the value in actions; keep the ending ≤10 words
Goal: Avoid slogan-like, preachy statements. Bury the “value” in actions, images, or outcomes, and land the ending with one ultra-simple action or …
Read MoreB01 | Hollow Emotion: Build empathy with facial cues + micro-actions + inner voice
Goal: In key scenes, add facial expression, micro-actions, and a short inner line so readers feel with the hero—not just watch the plot. 1) Why avoid …
Read MoreA04 | No Payoff: Close the loop with “Result + Light Takeaway”
Goal: On the last page, deliver a clear result + light takeaway to create closure and a callback—so it doesn’t feel like the story just stops. 1) Why …
Read MoreA03 | Weak Progression: Ensure a new beat/upgrade every ≤3 pages
Goal: Avoid stagnation or flat, linear narration. Make sure every ≤3 pages you add a progression beat—new info/location/character, rising risk, or an …
Read MoreA02 | No Engine: Build “Problem + Obstacle + Causal Chain” within Pages 1–4
Goal: Within Pages 1–4, make the hero’s problem explicit, introduce at least one obstacle/cost, and establish a because → so causal link so the story …
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